<html><head><meta http-equiv="content-type" content="text/html; charset=utf-8"></head><body style="overflow-wrap: break-word; -webkit-nbsp-mode: space; line-break: after-white-space;">Hi Erin,<div><br></div><div>Yes, this was very definitely a first draft so I am totally not surprised about the voicing. However, if you’d like to suggest changes (so track changes on or whatever Google calls it) please do so.</div><div><br></div><div>Since both you and Lourdes seem to think this is OK, I am going to head on! Wish me luck!</div><div><br></div><div>Ruth<br><div><br><blockquote type="cite"><div>On Jul 11, 2023, at 8:23 AM, Antognoli, Erin - REE-ARS <erin.antognoli@usda.gov> wrote:</div><br class="Apple-interchange-newline"><div><meta charset="UTF-8"><div class="WordSection1" style="page: WordSection1; caret-color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-family: Helvetica; font-size: 12px; font-style: normal; font-variant-caps: normal; font-weight: 400; letter-spacing: normal; text-align: start; text-indent: 0px; text-transform: none; white-space: normal; word-spacing: 0px; -webkit-text-stroke-width: 0px; text-decoration: none;"><div style="margin: 0in; font-size: 11pt; font-family: Calibri, sans-serif;">Ruth,<o:p></o:p></div><div style="margin: 0in; font-size: 11pt; font-family: Calibri, sans-serif;"><o:p> </o:p></div><div style="margin: 0in; font-size: 11pt; font-family: Calibri, sans-serif;">I like this structure so far. It breaks up the content into bite size chunks to highlight the steps repos can take more clearly. It will still get long, but that’s probably unavoidable with a topic like this.<o:p></o:p></div><div style="margin: 0in; font-size: 11pt; font-family: Calibri, sans-serif;"><o:p> </o:p></div><div style="margin: 0in; font-size: 11pt; font-family: Calibri, sans-serif;">I made a comment about language being clearer and sticking to one tense or the other but wasn’t sure if we were at that point yet so didn’t make any more suggestions. I see several places where we could reword to switch to active voice to make the statements more direct and action oriented. This will probably also shorten some of the content slightly. Let me know if you want me to go over this to make those changes and whether I should use track changes or not.<o:p></o:p></div><div style="margin: 0in; font-size: 11pt; font-family: Calibri, sans-serif;"><o:p> </o:p></div><div><div style="margin: 0in; font-size: 11pt; font-family: Calibri, sans-serif; background: white;"><b><span style="color: rgb(0, 32, 96); border: 1pt windowtext; padding: 0in;">Erin Antognoli</span></b><span style="color: rgb(0, 32, 96); border: 1pt windowtext; padding: 0in;">, </span><span style=""><a href="https://ischool.umd.edu/academics/masters-programs/master-of-library-and-information-science/" style="color: blue; text-decoration: underline;"><span style="color: rgb(0, 32, 96); border: 1pt windowtext; padding: 0in;">MLIS</span></a></span><span style="color: rgb(0, 32, 96); border: 1pt windowtext; padding: 0in;"> </span><span style=""><o:p></o:p></span></div><div style="margin: 0in; font-size: 11pt; font-family: Calibri, sans-serif; background: white;"><span style=""><a href="https://pronouns.org/what-and-why" style="color: blue; 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font-size: 11pt; font-family: Calibri, sans-serif;"><o:p> </o:p></div><div><div style="border-width: 1pt medium medium; border-style: solid none none; border-color: rgb(225, 225, 225) currentcolor currentcolor; border-image: none; padding: 3pt 0in 0in;"><div style="margin: 0in; font-size: 11pt; font-family: Calibri, sans-serif;"><b>From:</b><span class="Apple-converted-space"> </span>Esip-sustainabledm <<a href="mailto:esip-sustainabledm-bounces@lists.esipfed.org" style="color: blue; text-decoration: underline;">esip-sustainabledm-bounces@lists.esipfed.org</a>><span class="Apple-converted-space"> </span><b>On Behalf Of<span class="Apple-converted-space"> </span></b>Ruth Duerr via Esip-sustainabledm<br><b>Sent:</b><span class="Apple-converted-space"> </span>Monday, July 10, 2023 9:27 PM<br><b>To:</b><span class="Apple-converted-space"> </span>esip-sustainabledm <<a href="mailto:esip-sustainabledm@lists.esipfed.org" style="color: blue; text-decoration: underline;">esip-sustainabledm@lists.esipfed.org</a>><br><b>Subject:</b><span class="Apple-converted-space"> </span>[External Email][Esip-sustainabledm] Please review pages 8-10 of the CARE paper draft<o:p></o:p></div></div></div><div style="margin: 0in; font-size: 11pt; font-family: Calibri, sans-serif;"><o:p> </o:p></div><div style="border: 1.5pt solid greenyellow; padding: 1pt; margin: 1.5pt;"><div style="margin: 0in; font-size: 11pt; font-family: Calibri, sans-serif; background: ghostwhite;"><span style="font-size: 9pt; background: greenyellow;">[External Email]</span><span style="font-size: 9pt;"><span class="Apple-converted-space"> </span><br>If this message comes from an<span class="Apple-converted-space"> </span><b>unexpected sender</b><span class="Apple-converted-space"> </span>or references a<span class="Apple-converted-space"> </span><b>vague/unexpected topic;</b><span class="Apple-converted-space"> </span><br>Use caution before clicking links or opening attachments.<br>Please send any concerns or suspicious messages to:<span class="Apple-converted-space"> </span><a href="mailto:Spam.Abuse@usda.gov" style="color: blue; text-decoration: underline;">Spam.Abuse@usda.gov</a></span><span style="font-size: 9pt;"><o:p></o:p></span></div></div><div><div style="margin: 0in; font-size: 11pt; font-family: Calibri, sans-serif;">Hi folks,<span class="Apple-converted-space"> </span><o:p></o:p></div><div><div style="margin: 0in; font-size: 11pt; font-family: Calibri, sans-serif;"><o:p> </o:p></div></div><div><div style="margin: 0in; font-size: 11pt; font-family: Calibri, sans-serif;">I’ve completed, with lot’s of suggestions and comments, draft text for the Collective benefit section of the <a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/1DlcDNCyzV6GjNzulz25lPDeXx0EQ-28xJ_7Nv2InZz0/edit?usp=sharing" style="color: blue; text-decoration: underline;">paper</a> (pages roughly 8-10). I am wondering if you could take a quick look to see if that part is headed in an OK way. I’d like to finish the next 3 parts (ARE of CARE) before ESIP, so really would like to get your general impressions over the next day or two…<o:p></o:p></div></div><div><div style="margin: 0in; font-size: 11pt; font-family: Calibri, sans-serif;"><o:p> </o:p></div></div><div><div style="margin: 0in; font-size: 11pt; font-family: Calibri, sans-serif;">Thanks,<o:p></o:p></div></div><div><div style="margin: 0in; font-size: 11pt; font-family: Calibri, sans-serif;"><o:p> </o:p></div></div><div><div style="margin: 0in; font-size: 11pt; font-family: Calibri, sans-serif;">Ruth<o:p></o:p></div></div><div><div style="margin: 0in; font-size: 11pt; font-family: Calibri, sans-serif;"><o:p> </o:p></div></div><div><div style="margin: 0in; font-size: 11pt; font-family: Calibri, sans-serif;">PS: I will be adding the diagrams here in the next day or so as well….<o:p></o:p></div></div><div><div style="margin: 0in; font-size: 11pt; font-family: Calibri, sans-serif;"><o:p> </o:p></div></div></div></div><br style="caret-color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-family: Helvetica; font-size: 12px; font-style: normal; font-variant-caps: normal; font-weight: 400; letter-spacing: normal; text-align: start; text-indent: 0px; text-transform: none; white-space: normal; word-spacing: 0px; -webkit-text-stroke-width: 0px; text-decoration: none;"><br style="caret-color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-family: Helvetica; font-size: 12px; font-style: normal; font-variant-caps: normal; font-weight: 400; letter-spacing: normal; text-align: start; text-indent: 0px; text-transform: none; white-space: normal; word-spacing: 0px; -webkit-text-stroke-width: 0px; text-decoration: none;"><br style="caret-color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-family: Helvetica; font-size: 12px; font-style: normal; font-variant-caps: normal; font-weight: 400; letter-spacing: normal; text-align: start; text-indent: 0px; text-transform: none; white-space: normal; word-spacing: 0px; -webkit-text-stroke-width: 0px; text-decoration: none;"><br style="caret-color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-family: Helvetica; font-size: 12px; font-style: normal; font-variant-caps: normal; font-weight: 400; letter-spacing: normal; text-align: start; text-indent: 0px; text-transform: none; white-space: normal; word-spacing: 0px; -webkit-text-stroke-width: 0px; text-decoration: none;"><span style="caret-color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-family: Helvetica; font-size: 12px; font-style: normal; font-variant-caps: normal; font-weight: 400; letter-spacing: normal; text-align: start; text-indent: 0px; text-transform: none; white-space: normal; word-spacing: 0px; -webkit-text-stroke-width: 0px; text-decoration: none; float: none; display: inline !important;">This electronic message contains information generated by the USDA solely for the intended recipients. 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